Do you think this sounds like Angela?

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Do you think this sounds like Angela?

Post by Hunee » Oct 21st 2003, 12:49 am

Ok i was writing my fanfic and I wrote a letter from Angela to Brian and I wanted to know if this sounds like her or if you like it? thanks

Dear Brian,

I know that this is weird but I just want you to know how much your friendship means to me even if we can only value it at a distance that means more to me then not having our friendship at all. I know in the past everything between us has not been perfect but nothing is perfect, not even love. There are so many different ways to love someone and the way I love you is in such a special way only you and I could ever understand. I want to thank you for what you did when you wrote me that letter. You gave me the kind of love I could only dream of when you let me know the truth. Not just the truth of how you felt but the truth of friendship. You showed me the true meaning of love and for that I will always be greatful. There are so many words that are left unspoken every single day and now that the words that I have been longing to tell you since that day you showed me love I only hope that you can feel half of what you made me feel.

Your Friend,
Angela
so make the best of this test, and dont ask why
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Post by TomSpeed » Oct 21st 2003, 9:39 am

It's hard to tell how it sounds without any context. But this letter seems a little too formal for Angela. It doesn't flow. I also think Angela would talk to Brian in person, rather than write him a letter. Angela is a hard character to write. Keep trying though. Maybe you could post some scenes here in the forum.
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Post by Hunee » Oct 21st 2003, 9:50 am

I wrote that letter like 40 different times and I know it does not sound like Angela but she is a very hard character to write!!! In fact my fanfic is probally not even close to what the characters are like but I tried my best!!! if only I could get in to Winnie Holzmans mind!!! But if you want I could email some to you if you are in the mood to read... I wrote 5 different episodes so if your intersted let me know...
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Post by Clockwork orange » Oct 24th 2003, 5:28 pm

I'm definately interested in reading your stuff,so if you're in the mood just e-mail me yoda12@bigfoot.com
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Post by Hunee » Oct 24th 2003, 6:55 pm

ok i sent you my fanfic... hope you like...
so make the best of this test, and dont ask why
its not a question, but a lesson learned in time its something unpredictable, but in the end is right i hope you had the time of your life

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Post by BeverlyHills_RockStar16 » Aug 5th 2005, 9:01 pm

that was uknow like really good so what does she like LOVE brian now, like more than jordan or is she still his like uknow friend-i mean is she like still friends with brian or not cuz it would be really intresting if she fell like in love with brian , uknow cuz of the letter
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