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Carrying OnCarrying On-cut story. new one on new post.
Last edited by BANGBANG on Aug 3rd 2007, 12:54 pm, edited 2 times in total.
I LOVE BRIAN KRAKOW!
Re: Carrying OnI liked this scene, I think you captured the feel, and dialog of the show. Not many people can do that. I didn't like the Angela VO in the beginning of this scene. The Brian VO was good, but I'm not sure about adding VO's for the other characters. When I read, "So I officially feel like killing myself", I thought, wow what a great start to an Angela VO, it just seems like something Angela would say, but the rest of the VO didn't seem right to me. I don't think Angela would say something like that. I thought you were going to have Angela go on about how she feels frustrated about Brian and Jordan, but then the rest of the VO didn't seem to fit the scene. Not a bad scene, I especially liked the part I quoted in bold. All in all, not a a bad fanfic. Some of the stuff you wrote really did feel like the show, but other things didn't make sense to me. You are so close to writing a good fanfic, keep at it. Steve PS. Nobody ever knows what others will think of their fanfic, that's the kind of cool part of posting it, it's kind of a risk. Don't be afraid to take the risk, write more, and post it. What's amazing is when you can feel your life going somewhere. Like your life just figured out how to get good. Like, that second."
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