FANFIC FINALLY up....geocities.com/mscl_10
Posted: Dec 28th 2004, 9:19 pm
Sorry 4 the wait. The fanfic is now up. I hope u like it. Leave your comments in the guestbook.
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read what?tennisgirl55 wrote:Sorry 4 the wait. The fanfic is now up. I hope u like it. Leave your comments in the guestbook.
The address is posted in the thread title.BeverlyHills_RockStar16 wrote:read what?
I too had always wondered about where the story was, and then, stupidly, the day the title of the thread finally clicked for me (the same day I posted above), I never actually went to site to read the story. Until today. Way too late since I'm not sure if Tennisgirl55 is still coming to this forum. First, very cool page design. It's close to what I had in mind for my own 10 years story. Great job!Jody Barsch* wrote:The address is posted in the thread title.BeverlyHills_RockStar16 wrote:read what?
I love this. This was very cool. You do this several times in your story -- play with you reader's and you character's expectations -- it makes the reading fun.She answered it on the 2nd ring.
“Hello?” she said as she sipped the coffee.
“Angela?” said the voice on the other end. Angela froze, it couldn’t be, it’ couldn’t. She recognized the voice….Jordan?
Angela just sat dumbstruck as the phone dangled carelessly from her hand.
It can’t be, the past doesn’t really come back to haunt you…does it?
She listened again, but this time she heard a female voice….”Angela….hello?”
What a great moment of transition between the two stories.“When does your bus come, honey?” Patty changed the subject as if sensing Angela needed a bit more time to deal.
Bus, Just entering Three Rivers.
That last line is great.Angela stared out the window, she was just thinking of the brief conversation she had with her mother before she had left, 10 years ago. Her mother had wanted [her] to talk to Jordan, but she didn’t, even though she should have. Her mother knew she needed time to deal with the events that had unfolded, but was ten years too long to deal, was it ten years too late?
Nice play with the original text.I once thought that high school was a battlefield for your heart, but the rest of the world, that’s the heart of the war, and you just have to keep fighting
Another moment of playing with our and Angela's expectations.They began to walk from the bus terminal “Angela,” said Sharon “There is still one person you haven’t asked about.” Angela’s heart did a back flip; they were going to talk about Jordan.
“Brian’s coming to the reunion” Angela’s heart settled
It's great that he just kisses her. That that's it.Angela spun around to see Jordan, standing in front of her. Angela’s eyes widened and she opened her mouth to say something, but before she could Jordan grabbed her by the arms and pulled her into a deep kiss.
its a great story, cant wait for chapter 5 how is it going? i keep checking for updates in the hope it is uptennisgirl55 wrote:Chapters 3 and 4 are up. I'm so sorry it took so long, but I kept forgetting and when I did remember, I was doing something else so I'm so sorry.. I will try to write more often. Please tell me what you think I hope you all like it. Thanks.
tennisgirl55 wrote:Ok so i forgot about my fanfiction 4 a while, but I will try and update this week sometime (I will post when it is) and I'll try 2 update w/ 2 chapters:):)
Sorry again for the long wait but when I did think of it I was trying to sort out how I would write the next chapter but I think I have it all sorted:):) Thanks for all the comments for the past chapters.